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“Forty-five percent of teens are online ‚almost constantly’ – and they don’t know if it’s good for them“.
Assignment: According to the author: ‚It is possible that teens cannot agree on whether social media are good or bad for them, because, at different moments, they can be both.‘ Comment.
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In the following I’m going to comment whether teenagers can agree or can’t agree if social media are good for them and included the article „ Forty-five percent of teens are online ‚almost constantly’ – and they don’t know if it’s good for them“ written by Abby Ohlheiser published in the Washington Post on 31 may, 2018. First off all, social media are the best option for humans to express new possibilities for their future. They can find new attractions and places in the world, which they would never have heard of. And social networks are often used to find out the answer to questions, when not knowing the answer. Most of the people just take out their mobile phones, type it in and then they can read the answer.
And social media are used to stay in contact with your friends, even if they move or travel. But there are also negative points, for example that there aren’t just websites with good thoughts, like websites where violence or sexual content is shown. And it has to be mentioned that there are people, mostly men, who get on these websites and don’t do legitimate things. On top of that, there are teenagers, who use social network platforms to bully their classmates. For this they use networks where you can write anonymously. I come to the decision, that social media isn’t a big problem for teenagers.
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