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Plastic straws are a big prob­lem for the en­vir­on­ment, and I think they should be banned to help the planet. The main reason is that they take hun­dreds of years to break down, and when they do, they can harm an­im­als in the ocean. There are other kinds of straws that are bet­ter for the en­vir­on­ment, like paper straws or metal straws that can be used again and again.



Some people say that we need plastic straws for people with dis­ab­il­it­ies or ill­nesses. How­ever, there are other kinds of straws that can work for them, like soft sil­ic­one straws or metal straws that bend. These op­tions are both more sus­tain­able and re­usable.



For ex­ample, one way to help stop plastic straw waste is to ask res­taur­ants and cafes to use bet­ter straws or only give them out if people ask for them. We can also teach people about how plastic af­fects the planet and how using other kinds of straws can help. Ad­di­tion­ally, we can en­cour­age people to carry re­usable straws with them, so they al­ways have one on hand and don't need to use dis­pos­able plastic straws.



In con­clu­sion, I be­lieve that plastic straws should be banned com­pletely to help the planet. We can use other kinds of straws and make small changes to help make the world a bet­ter place. It is im­port­ant that we take care of the en­vir­on­ment and make sus­tain­able choices to pre­serve our planet's health for fu­ture gen­er­a­tions.

break down = zer­fal­len; dis­abi­li­ty - Ein­schrän­kung; en­vi­ron­ment - Um­welt; to ban sth. - etwas ver­bie­ten; plastic straws - Plastik-​Strohhalme;